defense: most people treat the words thesis and dissertation as interchangeable, but originally, at least, a thesis was a position one took and the dissertation was the argument by which one defended. Smith's ascension through the university ranks the need of a document detailing differentiation, which was eventually created. It would be better written: Questions as to whether Smith made further use of the manuscript from which he copied abstracts or whether he had previously invented the widgetiscope are rooted so far in the past that it is impossible to gather sufficient direct evidence. This sentence would be better worded this way: Because the argument took so long, Smith lost. It is usually written in the first person, but third person may also be used. The phrase "in wave" has an error. Disneyland, the following narrative essay involves a parent reflecting on taking his kids to Disneyland for the first time. The student means "Jones' first objective." This is a bad run-on.
Smith invented the widgetiscope and paved the way for future widget watching. It's not just that you miss subtleties this way. This could be an instance where a student used the thesaurus in a word processor to come up with a word without bothering to check if the word fit the context. Did the university re-open in 1667, or was the plague in 1667? Why should good ideas be funny? My stomach feels strange. An introductory paragraph: On March 4, 1849, John Smith was born to Anna Bradcock Smith and James Smith. A century is not a place, it is a section of time.